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优雅的姗姗——品读慕容姗姗的《游龙记》
——前山老张
见惯了武侠中的刀光剑影、遍地喋血，看见姗姗的《游龙记》，真有眼前一亮的感觉。龙腾小说网ltxsba.com
姗姗的小说，很有美学上的价值，尤其是语言美，在网络写手中还真是不多见。老张今天就想谈谈姗姗的语言，不过先声明：老张习惯就整体来看文章，在写作技术层面上绝对不擅长，说的对与不对，还望姗姗和诸位红袖的朋友谅解，并予以指正。
姗姗的语言，总体上看走的是优美雅致的路数，就算是偶有奇峰突兀，也会很快回归优雅的本路上来。“少年目送他离去，略一摇头，又复望向平静的海水怔怔出神，仿佛有无数的心事。明月映射下来，把他俊美绝伦的身形影射在船板上，拉成了很长一条影子，直至成为一。”“平静的夜总是驯服不了张狂羁傲的大海，片刻工夫，狂风四起，汹涌的波涛翻滚着打向船头，看似巨大的海船此时竟像一片随波逐流的落叶，随时有沉没的可能”，这其中隐含着人物的命运的走向，象征性的表述冲破了语言的限制，充满了张力。
但在随后的描写中，出现的是“细腻柔滑的白沙任顽皮起伏的海水肆意冲刷着缎子似的皮肤，偶尔的小贝壳趴在沙滩宽阔的胸膛上享受着清晨凉爽的气息，三三两两的渔船泊在安静的海边，随浪涛有规律地起伏着船身。”“海岸的另一边缓缓走来一名粗布罗衩的十五六岁的少女。衣着虽然朴素却也干净清爽，温婉柔美的容颜上那抹微红更显出一种无拘无束的野性的美，袅袅婷婷的身影绰约疏雅得像一幅清丽幽静的山水画。”这就不是优雅所能概括的了，简直可以和抒情散文相媲美了。
姗姗在娓娓道来中，对环境的描写也精美到位，“府邸中一间华丽幽雅的静室里兰香飘渺，古韵流长，宝剑长弓装饰有致，名家书画布置典雅，尤其是临窗一具形式奇古的焦尾古琴，更添风雅。靠墙一张古色古香的大床上帘幕斜挑”，大有如临其境的感觉，那种淡淡的优雅，在不经意间流露出来，极其别致。不仅深宅大院描写的精致入微，就连寻常巷陌也写的极好，“凉风徐徐，鸟鸣啾啾，空旷的大街上行人仍很稀少，只有几个为生计奔忙的商贩摆出了摊子，虽然打起十二分精神，还是掩饰不了满脸的倦容，正在与几个东挑西拣的主妇讨价还价”，老张看了，好像有回到了家乡的早市，“凉风徐徐，鸟鸣啾啾”不仅状物传神，难能可贵的是里面还传达出一种情绪，不被景物所拘束，深得超然之味道。
有一段姗姗写的极好，老张把它全部引出：
“夕阳温暖暮风轻，飞燕嫣然春蕾柔。古琴涤雾霞染袖，木叶流庭花满楼。
清风匆匆而过，吹皱一池春水，炊烟袅袅升起，燃一片红霞。偶尔一排大雁划破长空，纷纷扬扬的暮色透过红云缓缓洒下，轻柔地照在遍地繁花上，整个天地于是都披上了一层薄如蝉翼的红色纱衣。远处的山峦在虚无缥缈的薄雾笼罩下犹如一名小憩方醒的美艳少妇，慵懒中更显妩媚。不知何时，山林中又隐约传来了牧童那动人的歌谣，使得本已如花泥般柔软甜美的氛围中又新增了一抹迷离朦胧的气息。
正是在这样一处人间仙境里，踏着夕阳的余晖，缓缓走来一骑鹤立风标的人物。高大的白马上标枪样挺坐着一位剑眉星目，丰神俊朗的黄衫少年，观之神清韵远，雍容儒雅，宽袍缓带，怡然自若，风度仪态甚美。他怀中还裹着名清扬婉约，楚楚可人的蓝衫绝色少女，一抹红霞轻柔地照上她那张娇美的小脸，只见其娥眉淡扫，螓首低颔，面若凝脂，目如秋水，齿若瓠犀，领如蝤蛴，巧笑娇而不媚，美目顾盼生波，肌肤红润而风姿清雅，温婉秀丽有如仙子。少年拥着少女在花的海洋里放缰徐行，顿时使本已异常柔美的天地增色不少，好一对天造地设的壁人！忽然一阵清风徐徐吹来，他的发梢中掺着她的发丝，她的呼吸里混着他的气息，两人竟已达到浑然一体，物我两忘的境界！真是一次香艳的旅程！就连他们座下那匹白马似乎也通了灵性，悄无声息地踩在鲜花编成的柔软地毯上，生怕破坏了他们两情相悦的甜蜜氛围。
他们默默地走了一程，少女终于耐不住寂寞地回首娇笑道：‘师哥你怎么都不说话呀，难道你不愿理我么？’
少年闻言一惊，忙道：‘谁说我不愿理你？你美若天仙，我喜欢还来不及呢，怎会不理你？’
少女秀面一红，心里非常之甜蜜，可嘴上就是不饶他道：‘那我问你，这里的风景美还是我美？’
少年一愣，他历来最怕女孩子问这类问题，稍有不慎便会万劫不复！登时硬着头皮回答道：‘此处风景固然美甚，’他瞟瞟柳眉倒竖的少女，连忙续道：‘但却远远不及我的萧儿美！’
北冥萧这才转嗔为喜道：‘算你会说话！’南宫陵一颗心终于放了下来！
岂料北冥萧又叹道：‘可惜红颜终将老去，到时候我人老珠黄，你该不喜欢我了。’
南宫陵失笑道：‘自古名人与将相，谁敌如水逝流年。对人欢笑背人愁，滚滚红尘梦一场。’
北冥萧不禁回首奇道：‘看不出我们的南宫公子还是个大诗人呢。’
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