《游龙记》之评论
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南宫陵苦笑道：‘我自小看那些所谓的正人君子为了名利二字而勾心斗角，活得不知有多累。其实人生在世不过吃一碗饭，睡一张床，要那么多金银珠宝作什么？如果我能够选择，我只愿与我所爱的人找一处世外桃源住下，男耕女织，粗茶淡饭，平平淡淡地度过一生。你说可好？’”
别拍老张大段引用，这段老张以为写的实在精彩，情景交融，分不清哪是景、哪是情，风光秀丽，人物脱俗，两情相悦中透出淡淡的忧郁，如同施特劳施圆舞曲华丽的乐章，典雅而辉煌。语言的驾驭功力到了如此地步，断不是一朝一夕的事情，姗姗的苦功肯定是没有少下。
姗姗在写人物、写景物、写环境时都迈着优雅的步子，就连“兵者，不祥之器”的杀杀砍砍中，写得也是别具一格，“情急之中她好像忽然想起了什么，从怀中抽出一柄寒光闪闪的玉质弯刀！粲然夺目的碧玉光芒混合着森森的杀气迅速蔓延了整条甬道！远远望去，只见它犹如薄冰托着清云，碧荷盛着绿水，通体碧绿的刀身在华丽的外表下还隐隐透着种摄人心魄的妖艳杀气”，“薄冰托清云，碧荷盛绿水”，简直是诗一般的语言，果然妖艳无比，且优雅有加。
姗姗的文章，通篇都浸透了这种诗一般的优雅，“昙花一现流云烟，春水绿波换梦前。空负红颜秋月里，偏偏岁岁又年年。这是个擦肩而过的流年，多少有情人对面相逢不相识。然而昙花一现的青春岁月又经得住几遭命运的作弄？当我们蓦然回首，那人已在灯火阑珊处”、“此时寒风又起，雨更急，一瓣花儿经不住雨打风吹，无可奈何地落进了湖里。西门艳注视着那瓣在湖面上垂死挣扎的花儿，又叹了口气，幽幽吟道：‘雨夜茗香听落花，丰华怎奈流风擦。衾寒冷暖谁知晓，月下浮云水中沙。如今还有谁在意我的冷暖呢？’”、“淡淡烟雨淡淡愁，淡淡明月上西楼。淡淡流水溪中过，淡淡鱼儿水中游。淡淡清香香盈袖，淡淡蝴蝶落绣球。淡淡胭脂淡淡酒，淡淡酒解淡淡愁”之类的语言俯仰皆是，构成了绮丽的别样武侠风景。
读罢姗姗的大作，感觉姗姗也是一位一袭白衣，独立花间的儒雅侠女，那句“萧儿转身蹁跹而去，背影美丽优雅犹如仙子”，老张以为简直就像是姗姗的自我写照。
评慕容姗姗的《游龙记》
——逆风
首先一，作者是非常用心的在写这本书。打开书的目录，每个章节都是四个字，工工整整，扑面而来就是女作者常见的唯美观，就能感觉到作者对这本书的审慎态度。
作为一个作者，文笔自然是重要的，这部书看下来，作者不仅文风秀丽，而且对古诗也颇有造诣。但是稍微有些遗憾的是，作者自己写的诗，并未深深的寓情寓景，淡淡的，难以以诗拉动读者。
女作者写的书，大多是细腻的，姗姗的书，温柔清雅，其中婉转之处，颇令人回味。辞藻虽偶有堆砌之感，却不会令人感觉厌烦。往下看来，书中人物对话，场景描写，相貌叙说，无有漏处。但是此书也失于细腻，转折之处交代得明明白白，读者却没有了遐想空间。若是某些地方淡淡带过，读者看后，更能增添回味之感。
所谓武侠，武字为先，侠字第二。一部好的武侠作品，打斗场面的描写，几乎就决定了这部书的优劣。姗姗似乎更擅长叙情，委婉低沉，儿女娇羞，书中写得处处令人心动。可惜了，没有极佳的打斗场景，看来就觉得有些平淡。侠字写来，比武字更难，若是一书看来，能使人豪气万千，或怅英雄难欢，那侠字，就入骨了。姗姗的书，看下来，能陪书中人物欢笑或悲伤，但这种感觉，不是由侠字带来的，而是儿女情生。
作者对书中人物性情的拿捏，把握得不错，尤其是书中少女的言语，写得更佳。作者的文笔，放在网络作品中，比所谓的许多大神是强多了，但是欠缺了意境的营造。
从潜质来看，作者的书，不属网络快餐一列，任何颇有文学修养的人，用心写的作品，都不是网络快餐，可惜姗姗也属于这种人这种写法，不能得到太多读者的青睐。所以只能建议作者，继续自己的路，好酒，终归不是怕巷子深的。
书评结束，给姗姗提一些建议：
1.写书的时候，最好参考一下梁羽生的武功招式描写，以你的细腻，一定会写出精彩的打斗场景。
2.描述不出“侠”字，也不是很关键的，若能用缕缕情丝，绑住读者的心，这部作品也能大放异彩。其实姗姗的书，已经能使读者为之心动，再努力下去，读者的心，就会随着书中人物的际遇而起伏。
3.立意，武侠作品，金庸的博大，古龙的奇诡，梁羽生的文采，李凉的诙谐，很难突破。写武侠，必须要有新意，这个新意，或许一时难以赢得读者青睐，但是就怕的是不能坚持自己的风格。
顺便说一声，其实给几部书做过书评后，姗姗的书，给我感觉是最好的，可惜她写的不是网络快餐。
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